Caligula's Launderette

thank you. about the "lidded lids" I repeated it because I wanted to tie the two stanzas together...maybe not...I try putting in something else the second time. thanks again. CL

sry about the manuever thing, i got into a big discussion with my boyfriend on how to spell it, he's from Islington and he really sucks at spelling, so I ...

I agree with your point, a story is so much more than dialogue, but here I found that adding more words cluttered the dialogue. Not so much in my other ...

look I REWROTE! YAY! CL

hey Ariel is a guy...i know kinda wierd huh to name a guy that (but Shakespeare did, check out the tempest), but it works so well with him, cause it's ...

want to know what dreamer character you are go here cheers CL

want to know what dreamer character you are go here cheers CL

thanks for the review. no, not inspired by the cure, but that does give me an idea. cheers CL

thank you both for the nice comments. And Kay Kay, thank you for such the enlightening review. cheers CL

thank you all for such nice comments. I love these guys, they are so fun to write about. I am currently working on a story called Eulogy of a Dreamer ...

thanks a bunch guys, I still have so much to fix, I'm working on it as fast as I can. Oh and yes, thought processees on why she takes the ...

thanks. yeah when i wrote this yesterday it was me trying to get ideas down as fast as I could. I'll revise it soon. ick i hate the paragraph after ...

so sorry hon, when I posted this I had no idea that our poems were linked by titled. sorry about that. thank you guys for all the reviews. cheers CL

I liked it, very nice imagery in this. cheers CL

I didn't realize that about the names. When I first wrote this I didn't name anyone. I don't have a name for the guy yet so I'll work on that ...